too much pane
2009.04.11 (Saturday) – 1:26 amPoetry often enters through the window of irrelevance.
M. C. Richards
The window of irrelevance
opens from my head.
My friends stare corner-eyed
through un-shuttered blinds,
Then
look away.
Opportunity flies
when
opened to the wrong person.
Some drafty days—followed by nights
when
I regard too much—
demand I clean the glass.
Then
I need to see
clearly what is through,
and what is pane.
3 Responses to “too much pane”
this is really cool. you carry the basic metaphor through very well, with depth and (no pun intended) insight.
i read this poem aloud to nancy, and she loved it! she noted especially the phrase “My friends stare corner-eyed / through un-shuttered blinds”. i like that one too, and also your parenthetical “–followed by nights / when / I regard too much –”.
By throwshiswords on Apr 11, 2009
Thank you. This one really worked out smoothly for me. Yet If you’re interested in the differences between the very first draft and final, consider this:
http://www.facebook.com/friends/?ref=tn#/note.php?note_id=71451065652&ref=mf
By mark gadzikowski on Apr 11, 2009
i hope you don’t mind, i added you to my blogroll
By throwshiswords on Apr 14, 2009